monster in the water

one day a boy decided to swim in the lake the lake was dirty and nasty but something familer about the lake the boy didn't care he swim in it but the boy swim and swim and swim but he never reach the top he turn into a monsters he got fins and claws and sharp teeth the boy family didnt see there son again so they close the lake forever until short reason so when more kids came and came and came they got eatin by the boy monster so the family left and never came to the lake again that is my story of a monster in the water the end

It's missing some parts though

Not going to lie, this was horrible. Your punctuation was completely missing, the story had no build-up whatsoever, heck, it wasn't even that scary.

Also wrong place moved to the right place.

Again he's a little M.R..

i know what it mean justin

mental retardation nobody perfect and im not good making stuff up so just if u dont like it just dont write on my blog anymore im was born like that so that mean u don't have to make fun of me i can't help it nobody perfect

im mr because it means that im miracle reborn of jesus crist what else matters

dude calm down and its a public forum anyone can write on this.

so

least im telling the truth

I don't care if you're telling the truth, it's following the rules that counts. I know you can't help it. You should ask people to help you like your bro or Seth, and when i'm around me. Were not trying to be mean. Were actually trying to help, by telling you the truth, and by telling you how it is. If you think were mean then you should open your eyes up to the world. every day the world gets more cruel by the minute. (And don't say because God is coming either) It's just the fact that the world is changing and so are its inhabitants.

Please don't turn this into a religious discussion, and no one was making fun of you. Also, jamie, don't double post, there's a perfectly good edit button right at the top right corner.

I'm not trying to turn it into a religious discussion. If I did, i'm sorry.

sorry for bringing it up if i did open my eyes well they all ready are the world is changing and people. even stop believing about everything around this world seeing what going to happen to this world. and so people are not perfect and looks are not everything is the heart is in u it's perfect and im just tired of the drama and fighting around this world it hurting people and also hurting me when i see people arguing and fighting it like a bug is eating my stomach it hurts and im not trying to change all ways is yall chose what yall beliving in things and most people are different they are just like everybody else they cant help what happen to them that don't mean people can't just make fun of them they really have the heart inside them and um so it's yall chose to do anything yall won't to it dosen't make fun of people they really don't know who they are and how they sound like so that what people need to look in there mirror to see what they look

Dude we aren't making fun of how you look or anything. Were just trying to help.

trying to help my foot

That last post was not necessary, jamieearlsblues. I don't want to see a continuation of this unless it has to do with a literary analysis of the story.

Got it?

I under stand Ganon, so does the boy/monster die?